English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph

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Improving a Paragraph

Rewrite the paragraph below making changes as necessary to improve the wording and/or flow.

Day 1

- If you could live anywhere where would it be?

If I could live anywhere in the world I’d live in California. First of all the weather is always nice there. And

since it’s where celebrities live you might get to see someone famous! Plus it’s right by the beach so you can

go swimming everyday! Yep, California is the best place to live.

Suggestions: Sequencing, examples, adding detail, avoid redundancy

Day 2 -

What was the Best Day of Your Life?

The best day of my life was my 10th birthday. First my I woke up to a brand new puppy! Then my mom and

dad took me to the toy store and let me pick out anything I wanted! Later on my friends came over and we

played games all night long! It was the best birthday and best day ever!

Suggestions: Reiterate, extra details

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