English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph (Page 4 of 5) in pdf

English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph Page 4

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Improving a Paragraph

Rewrite the paragraph below making changes as necessary to improve the wording and/or flow.

Day 1

- If you could live anywhere where would it be?

If I could live anywhere in the world I’d live in California. First of all the weather is always nice there. And

since it’s where celebrities live you might get to see someone famous! Plus it’s right by the beach so you can

go swimming everyday! Yep, California is the best place to live.

Suggestions: Sequencing, examples, adding detail, avoid redundancy

If I could live anywhere in the world I’d choose California. Why

California? First, the weather is almost always nice and sunny, so no more

cold winters. Second, a lot of Celebrities live in California so you could be

eating dinner right next to a famous celebrity! And last, most cities in

California are right by a beach so you can hop out of bed and go for a relaxing

swim! From great weather, to celebrities, to a beach for a backyard, California

is the place for me!

Day 2 -

What was the Best Day of Your Life?

The best day of my life was my 10th birthday. First my I woke up to a brand new puppy! Then my mom and

dad took me to the toy store and let me pick out anything I wanted! Later on my friends came over and we

played games all night long! It was the best birthday and best day ever!

Suggestions: Reiterate, extra details

While I’ve had some pretty great days, I think the best day of my life was

my 10th birthday. First I woke up to a brand new puppy licking my face.

Then, after playing with my puppy, my mom and dad took me to the toy store

and let me pick out any toy I wanted! Finally, later in the day my friends came

over for my birthday party and we played games all night long. It wasn’t just

the best birthday ever, it was the best day ever!

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