English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph (Page 4 of 5) in pdf

English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph Page 4

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Improving a Paragraph

Rewrite the paragraph below making changes as necessary to improve the wording and/or flow.

Day 1

- Would you rather live in the Sahara Desert or in Antarctica?

Antarctica. If I lived in the dessert it would be waaaay to hot! I already sweat buckets in the summer, so living in the

sahara would be like torture! Plus the dessert has all kinds of creepy crawly things. From scorpions to lizards to even

tarantulas! YUCK! Give me nice cool antarctica anyday!

Suggestions: Spelling, grammar, capitalization.

I would rather live in Antarctica. While it would be cold, the desert would

be worse since it’s way too hot. While I don’t mind heat too much, I already

sweat buckets in the summer, so living in the middle of a desert would be like

torture! Not to mention the desert is home to all kinds of creepy crawly thing.

From scorpions to lizards to ugly, hairy tarantulas. Yuck! Give me nice, cool

Antarctica any day of the week.

Day 2 -

If you could have one object from a video game, what would it be and why?

I would choose the propeller suit from my favorite game, Super Mario Wii. This is basically a suit that lets you fly in

the air! Like a mini helicopter. I’d choose this cause I could fly anywhere I wanted to go. I wouldn’t have to have

anyone give me a ride or ride in my brothers smelly car. Having the proppeler suit would be a life saver!

Suggestions: Combine sentences, reiterate

If I could have any object from a game I’d choose the propeller suit from

my favorite game, Super Mario Wii. This item is a suit you wear that lets you

act like a little mini helicopter, flying high up into the air. This power would

be great because I could fly anywhere I wanted to go. No more waiting for

someone to give me a ride or having to sit in the back of my brothers smelly

car. Having the propeller suit would make life so much easier, what a life

saver!

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