English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph (Page 5 of 5) in pdf

English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph Page 5

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Improving a Paragraph

Rewrite the paragraph below making changes as necessary to improve the wording and/or flow.

Day 3

- Name one object you own that you couldn’t live without and why.

The one thing I couldn’t live without is my phone. I know it sounds silly, but anytime I don’t have my phone I just

feel super crazy weird! I do not just use it to make calls though, I also use it to play games when I’m bored or check

my friends status on facebook I use it for everything. I do not know what I’d do without my phone!

Suggestions: Remove redundant words, use sets of 3, contractions.

The one object I own that I couldn’t live without is my cell phone. I

know it seems silly, but already whenever I leave home without it, I just feel

weird! But I wouldn’t just be missing phone calls, you see my phone is also

used for gaming, for checking my friends facebook statuses and for hundreds

of other things. If I didn’t have my phone I don’t know what I’d do!

Day 4 -

Mr. Wiskers’ kittens

You’ll never believe what happened to me last night. It all started about a month ago. I noticed my cat, Mr. Wiskers

was getting kinda pudgy. I tried feeding him less but he would just make all kinds of meows! Well last night I noticed

Mr. Wiskers had a couple strange furry things around him. When I picked one up it turn out to be a Kitten! Can you

believe it? It turns out Mr. Wiskers was actually Mrs. Wiskers all along!

Suggestions: Transition times smoother, grammar

You won’t believe what I learned last night! Actually, let me start from

the beginning. About a month ago I noticed my cat, Mr. Wiskers, was getting

kinda pudgy. To help him lose some weight I cut back on the food I was

giving him, but as soon as I did, he’d just meow nonstop. Well, last night I

noticed Mr. Wiskers had some strange furry things around him. Imagine my

surprise when I picked one up and discovered a newborn kitten! It turns out

Mr. Wiskers wasn’t a Mister at all! I guess I should have named him, Mrs.

Wiskers, Huh?

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