English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph (Page 5 of 5) in pdf

English Grammar Worksheet - Improving A Paragraph Page 5

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Improving a Paragraph

Rewrite the paragraph below making changes as necessary to improve the wording and/or flow.

Day 3

- Would you rather be 10 feet tall or 1 foot tall?

I would rather be really big! If I were really small someone could step on me or I could be attacked by normal sized

animals! If I were big I could do all kinds of things a whole lot easier! Like getting on the roof of my house or playing

basketball! Of course I’d have to buy all new clothes, but being that tall would definitely be worth it!

Suggestions: Reiterate, adding detail, adding examples

If I had to be either really small or really tall I’d definitely choose to be

tall! I mean if I were small any normal sized cat would like a lion! Yikes! Plus

being that tall would have all sorts of advantages. I could climb up on the roof

of my house no problem or become a star basketball player. Heck, I wouldn’t

even have to move away from the hoop I could just wait for someone to throw

me the ball! Of course if I were that tall, I’d have to buy all new clothes, but it

would be worth it.

Day 4 -

The largest omelette.

Have you ever woked up and wanted an omelette? Well if you were in Turkey on ‘World Egg Day’ you would have

more than you could stomach. That’s because chefs cooked an omlet weighing 2,000 pounds! WOW! They created it

to break the world record! An omlette the size of a garage? Wow what a sight to see!

Suggestions: Tying thoughts together, exaggerated details

Have you ever woken up and wanted an omelette? Well if you woke up in

Turkey on ‘World Egg Day’ you’d have more than you could stomach. That’s

because chefs got together to cook an omelette weighing 2,00 pounds! Wow!

But they weren’t trying to feed Paul Bunyan, they were just trying to break a

world record. But waking up to an omelette the size of a garage? What a sight

that must have been!

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